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I stare at page, the words won’t come,
At end of day, my mind is numb,
I feel an ache, from deep inside,
I want to scream, not run and hide,

Alone I am, I know that’s true,
No one for me, cupid’s fool,
I can but watch, the life pass by,
But no tear will run, from my eye,

I need someone, to fill this space,
To slow the time and mark it’s pace,
A hand to hold, when things are tough,
So I don’t give in, when life is rough,

To share my bed and hold me tight,
And be there still, at end of night,
To push me on, when I bow down,
To make a smile, where once was frown,

To teach me how, to love again,
And above all this, be my friend.
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Just a little of my mind spilled on page.

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:icontragicvista:
it has potential,
but it's a bit... cliched,
(no offense, dear, most rhyming poetry is.)

To teach me how, to love again,
And above all this, be my friend.


and

Alone I am, I know that’s true,
No one for me, cupid’s fool,<i/>

those don't exactly rhyme, and it bothers me.
i sound like a bitch now, so this comment is over.

overall, it was a good read. just some things to think about changing.


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we musn't meet again.
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Thanks for your comments... Will consider a re-write in the future... :hug:

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:icontragicvista:
you're welcome. (:



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we musn't meet again.

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